My first poems to be published in a national periodical in
India appeared in Imprint in June, 1978, although they were
written years earlier. I had written poetry all my life and
read a lot of poetry and about poetry. I had begun having
lucid dreams (dreams in which I know I am dreaming)
spontaneously in 1975, and in 1978 I began a series of
experiments in trying to create poetry while dreaming lucidly.
All the following text, except for what is in brackets, comes
directly from my dream journal. I include only the occasions
when I remembered, while dreaming, to do the poetry
experiment. All dreams occurred in the city of Hyderabad in
South India.
November 9, 1978. In the next known dreams
I should make some experiments on receiving poetry from the
unconscious. [Before I heard of the term "lucid dream," I had
called such dreams "known dreams" in my journal.] This would
mean to become quiet as much as possible and receptive and let
a poem come if it will, as I would do when awake. This sounds
difficult since when awake, only when the environment is
amenable and I am in the proper mood and feel a poem may come
would I attempt it. When a dream becomes known it would
probably not at all be a proper calm environment suitable for
being receptive to poetry. Yet I must try it for what I may
learn.
I would not plan to erase the dream environment unless it
were too disturbing. I would not try to speak, but let poetry
come internally. Two lines would be sufficient to be both
poetry and not too much to remember when I wake up.
December 3. When I realized that the
quantity of cake that I was eating from my hand was growing, I
realized I was dreaming. I resisted continuing with the dream
story. I looked around and saw that I was walking along a path
in the snowy woods. I stepped over to lean against a tree in
order to relax to wait for poetry to come to me, but I woke
up.
December 23. I walked toward the verandah
of the building, holding a child in my arms. The child
apparently saw himself, and as I lay him down, I said, "He can
see himself, as in a dream." Then I realized I was dreaming. I
remembered about the poetry and relaxed against one of the
columns of the verandah. For a moment I waited and then
concentrated on what may come. I thought of two lines of
poetry, which I noticed did not rhyme, but which could have
prepared for later rhymes. I woke up and wrote down what I
could remember. It was:
"When in the night the waking dreams
I extol I hear the . . ."
There could be a mistake in there. It came to me as poetry
comes to me. I see these words as similar to what comes to me
when I compose poetry, but not as something which I would
bother to write down. As an example, if I had been awake, I
would quickly have replaced the word "extol." I don't believe
I have ever used the expression "waking dreams," but I see it
as a real poetic possibility [perhaps for lucid dreams]. The
rhythm is pleasant enough to retain. I have no idea what the
meaning of the second line was to be. But then, I do not
always know what the meaning is when I accept a line. I
conclude that receiving poetry might be as possible while
dreaming as while awake. It might perchance be easier. This
was better than I expected.
December 31. I was dancing with a woman in
a very musical dream, when I realized I was dreaming. Although
I was intensely interested in dancing, I made myself stop. I
leaned against a wall for a firm relaxing and looked in a new
direction. While I thought of poetry, I noticed a woman
leaning against a pole at a distance, smiling at me.
I kept my eyes open and felt the poetry come, without any
effort. [In a lucid dream, I usually kept my eyes open in
order not to lose the visual image.] It was no different from
when I do the same when awake. A first line came, but I was
not satisfied with it and changed it perhaps by one word.
Letting that be, I added a second line which rhymed. I was
satisfied with it, at least as an initial composition and
thought I should wake up to write it down. It began to
disappear, but I woke up and wrote it down.:
"Once the strange and overcoming
night Brought me ______ and to the
light."
I could not remember it exactly. I knew that the two lines
had the same rhythm. I wrote it quickly knowing that it might
not be entirely correct. After writing, I felt it probably
should have been:
"Once the strange and overcoming
night [three beats] and brought me to the
light."
It was a presentable poetic thought, the idea even being in
harmony with the poem of December 23. When I composed this
time and the last time, I did not think of what subject I
would compose on. I just accepted what came, judging it as it
came. I had feared that it would not be easy to suddenly drop
everything and think poetry. Yet both times some suitable
lines came without any trouble.
Last night's lines were acceptably beautiful, without
clichÚ, and original. Rhyming and other sound structures were
acceptable. They are not very clever rhymes, but appropriate.
The word "brought" adds consonance. Poetic obliqueness is
there. The word "overcoming" has multiple effect. "Night" and
"light" are frequent concepts in my waking poetry.
January 6, 1979. I saw a green towel
hanging gracefully away from the wall towards me rather than
down. But I also felt that I was standing on the wall, rather
than on the floor. I was confused, but it made me realize I
was dreaming. I felt shaky and disoriented. I thought that the
only way to make myself comfortable was to sit on the towel
that draped outward, which I did, feeling insecure. I got only
one line of "poetry," which came with a bit of force:
"When under the world the basements
congeal . . ."
I then woke up.
This line must be related to my disorientation in the dream
and the feeling that what was below my feet was quite
insecure. Although subjectwise, this "poem" was different from
the earlier ones, it was again about my dream situation. I
will choose a subject for the next poem to be about, to see
whether I can direct the poetry a little more and get it away
from the dream context. I will still let it flow and not force
it, but I will begin it by thinking about horses, a subject I
do not write poems about.
[Another important element of this dream was the fact that
the towel I had seen in the dream was the actual towel hanging
above my sleeping head from the structure used for holding up
my mosquito net. This fact seems not directly related to the
poetry experiment.]
January 17. It was a dream, almost
entirely forgotten, of former times. In the thick green grass,
I saw a power lawn mower. It was such an anachronism, that I
realized I was dreaming. I remembered the poetry experiment. I
moved forward and thought, "The Delhi tree . . ." I had no
time to develop or change the words. I woke up.
February 24. Snow lay all around as I
walked up the street, uphill. Why did I have no books, if I
was going to school? I must have come from home, but I could
not remember any home. So I realized I was dreaming. I thought
of poetry and knew that it was to be about horses. I composed
"black horse, white horse . . ." It was two complete lines of
poetry. However, I went on, forgetting that I was dreaming and
forgetting most of what I composed.
After further dreaming, I came out of a cellar and thought
that that was a roundabout way to go. Thereupon I again
realized I was dreaming. I remembered that I had earlier done
the poem about the black horse and the white horse. The tall
grain that I was walking through was distracting me, and I
wanted to walk out of it a little so that it wouldn't scrape
me. I saw two deer nearby eating. I began my poem, "Horsy,
horsy," but I woke up.
When I woke up, all I could think of supposedly from the
first poetry work was "Black horse, white horse, racing and
chasing." However, "racing and chasing" was from Scott's
"Lochinvar" which we were discussing when I taught my English
class yesterday, and it may not have appeared in the dream. I
had been reading Jung recently, and the "black" and "white,"
showing opposites and wholeness, got me thinking then, while
awake, of my poetry experiments and of black horses and white
horses. I then figured that I might have prejudiced my dream
experiment [by thinking about this ahead of time]. Which
apparently I did. Because the black and white horses came from
aforethought, they did not come from the ongoing dream itself,
as had happened in earlier dreams. Two deer. Substitute for
the horses? Then "Horsy, horsy." How awful.
April 2. I had discovered the house hidden
behind other houses, and upstairs in a large room, a few of us
gathered together. A large black panther came bounding into
the room near the men. The woman with the baby stood off to
the side. Oh, that again. I realized that as wild animals had
appeared in recent dreaming, so again this was a dream. I
thought I'd let it be for now, then if the panther were to
jump at anyone, I'd just stop it. Before I could do anything,
the panther attacked the woman with the baby, and they
disappeared behind the door. Oh well, I decided, it doesn't
matter.
I asked a man about the history of a certain house in view.
Then I remembered about the poetry experiment. I turned from
him, and he said, I think, something about watching my step.
Thinking about the panther and about the idea that the panther
may represent my passions, I composed:
"The panther's black and greyish
skin Wraps tight around me as I jump
within."
The composition came rather quickly. I recognized that the
panther was myself. However, all the wording and the
implications of the lines was not thought through. I didn't
like the word "greyish," especially the "ish" part, which was
necessary for the rhythm.
The area I saw was rather dark. So I turned around hoping
to find more light, so that I may not lose the dream
environment. I found a small area of light, and as I further
worked on my composition, the light increased, and I was no
longer concerned about losing the dream. I remembered about
the horse (actually, horses) and that they should be black and
white. I changed the poem to:
"The horse's black and whitish
skin Wraps tight around me as I jump
within."
I thought that I should then wake up, to write down the
words. So I woke myself up, remembered the lines and wrote
them down.
Later, when I was near the edge of a cliff, I realized
again that I was dreaming. I believed there was a city below
the cliff. I remembered that I had done the poetry experiment.
I ran to the cliff and flew over the edge. In a half attempt
at poetry, I flew singing over and over, "I went flying over
the city," to the tune of "The bear went over the mountain." I
was actually flying over a large railway yard, with a few
trains and lots of tracks. I did not wake up right away and
soon forgot that I was dreaming.
April 3. [analysis continued] While I
would not have left the lines as they are, the horse poem
shows characteristics of poetry --rhymes, repetitions of
sound, a workable rhythm, and a thought that was quite poetic.
The key thought of the horse's skin enclosing me and of the
horse's jumping being my jumping [inspired by the panther] was
not thought through. It was the unconscious that expressed it.
I consider that I have successfully composed two lines of
verse within the dream. The poem would need more lines plus
the usual polishing up, and I don't usually depend on end
rhymes [rhymes at the end of lines]. While I remembered to
write about horses, the lines I composed deal with the dream
itself, beginning with the panther and working from there.
I have produced and remembered seven fragments of poetry
from dreams--four of one line or more and three of only part
of a line. In all cases but one, I either did not have time to
complete two lines or completing them, I forgot parts. The
three short fragments (Delhi tree; black horse, white horse;
horsy, horsy) are difficult to judge because of their brevity,
except that the last is undoubtedly bad.
It is better to judge only the longer pieces for the
success of the experiment. Of these four, I remembered only
one two-liner completely. Each of the four showed the
characteristics of poetry, although each would need further
work done on it. Each was about the dream situation itself, in
spite of my being able in one to compose on a predetermined
subject. Each showed possible influence from my writing while
awake. Composing poetry while dreaming was easier than I
expected it to be, except for the real difficulties of time
being limited, the experiment ending abruptly, my inability to
write the words down, the tendency to forget what I composed,
and not being able to make a final judgment of the lines while
dreaming.
April 16. The fact that my poetry in
dreams concerned itself with the dream itself is probably
explained by the fact that the dream is already expressing my
unconscious thoughts. The unconscious does not appear to have
two separate layers of thought ready to express themselves at
the same time, one in poetry and one in dream.
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